【帮忙看下这篇文章(初一的)有没有错误,顺便提点建议MyBestFriendJennyistheoneofmyfriendsandsheismybestfriend.Sheisreallybeautiful.Shehaslonghair,bigblackeyesandabigredmouth.Sheisstrongbutthin.Jennyreal】-成语搜问答网

【帮忙看下这篇文章(初一的)有没有错误,顺便提点建议MyBestFriendJennyistheoneofmyfriendsandsheismybestfriend.Sheisreallybeautiful.Shehaslonghair,bigblackeyesandabigredmouth.Sheisstrongbutthin.Jennyreal】

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帮忙看下这篇文章(初一的)有没有错误,顺便提点建议

MyBestFriend

Jennyistheoneofmyfriendsandsheismybestfriend.

Sheisreallybeautiful.Shehaslonghair,bigblackeyesandabigredmouth.Sheisstrongbutthin.

Jennyreallylikessinginganddrawing.SheoftenlistenssomeCDswithavideoanddrawssomepictures.Ithinkthepicturesareallverynice.Shealsolikeswritingthingsalot.So,shelikestodosomewritingexercise.

Wearebestfriends.Butwearenotinthesameschoolnow.Inwintervacation,sheusuallycomestomyhomeandwedoourhomework.Sometimes,weplaycomputergamesintogether.I’mhappytowecangettogetheragain.

偶乱写的拉~(因为水平实在有限)

开学要交作业的,错误多的话很难看的.

所以,

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　　原问：MyBestFriend 　　Jennyisoneofmyfriendsandthensheismybestfriend. 　　Sheisreallybeautiful.Shehaslonghair,bigblackeyesandabigredmouth.Sheistallbutthin. 　　Jennylikessinginganddrawingverymuch.SheoftenlistenssomeCDsonarideoanddrawssomepictures.Ithinkthepicturesareallverynice.Shealsolikeswritingthings.So,sheoftenmakesomewritingexercise. 　　Wearegoodfriends.Butwearenotinthesameschoolnow.Inwintervacation,sheusuallycomestomyhomeandwedoourhomeworktogether.Sometimes,weplaycomputergames.I'mhappythatwecangettogetheragain. 　　建议：稍稍注意一下少用重复的,包括意义和用词.这样会更好.